Writing with Clarity
Poor: I found my dog under the car with a broken leg.
Better: I found my dog with a broken leg under the car.
Poor: There are many students that attend football games during the fall season.
Better: Many students attend football games in the fall.
Poor: Russell Westbrook won the MVP award during the 2017 NBA season. The athlete is a current player for the Oklahoma City Thunder.
Better: Russell Westbrook, an Oklahoma City Thunder player, won the 2017 NBA MVP award.
Poor: American blogger Perez Hilton said Friday that Kylie Jenner will give birth at the beginning of February.
Better: Kylie Jenner will give birth at the beginning of February, the blogger said.