Writing effectively

Writing with Clarity

Poor: I found my dog under the car with a broken leg.

Better: I found my dog with a broken leg under the car.

Reducing Clutter

Poor: There are many students that attend football games during the fall season.

Better: Many students attend football games in the fall.

Sentence Variety

Poor: Russell Westbrook won the MVP award during the 2017 NBA season. The athlete is a current player for the Oklahoma City Thunder.

Better: Russell Westbrook, an Oklahoma City Thunder player, won the 2017 NBA MVP award.

Sentence Emphasis 

Poor: American blogger Perez Hilton said Friday that Kylie Jenner will give birth at the beginning of February.

Better: Kylie Jenner will give birth at the beginning of February, the blogger said.

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